Life is so Beautiful

[kaly]

This is my first shot at creativity. I have written some articles before, but they were more of my feelings. This is the first time, I am using my imaginative mind. Do let me know your suggestions.

Title - Life is so Beautiful

I felt I was the happiest man on earth. I still remember all my friends saying that I will never find a date in my life as I was so dumb.

"Life is so beautiful"

Life can bring so many twists. Looking at the girl that I married, I felt proud. Today, in a pink skirt and a white top and her dimple cheek, made her look even more gorgeous. I was sure, I cannot ask for more.

Inspite of all the best things happening, I knew something was not correct. Something was missing.

As we were walking in our lush green garden, I showed her a distant castle which was popular at our place. I always heard of strange stories that devils lived up there.

People were scared to go there. I was scared too. Not today, not anymore. Moreover, I was not alone now. I was with the love of my life.

Hearing all this, my wife became excited. She wanted to visit the castle. We decided, we would go in the evening, and return back before night.
After having couple of drinks, I felt very good. I could hear my inner voice saying "It will be all fun"

We started walking towards the castle. Walking with her made me feel so happy.
"Life is so beautiful". I loved her so much. It took us, much longer than expected to reach the castle.It was a very old castle, very beautiful. The whole castle was in brown, with shades of green here and there.

I had carried my pistol, just to be on a safe side. It was dark inside and we forgot to carry a torch. Luckily, I had my lighter to show some light. There were lot of cobwebs and we had to tear them all to go inside. A sign that no one visited for a long long time. We could hear our voices echoing. It was nice. In one corner, we saw a small photograph and from a distance, the lady looked beautiful.

We went closer to the photograph and I cleared the dust to see her clearly. I was shell shocked. I could feel the grip on my hand tightening. It was the photograph of my wife in black and white. Beads of sweat started dripping from my forehead. Again I felt, something was not correct. I turned to see my wife and she was laughing. I could see her front teeth projecting down. She was now laughing hard.

It all dawned on me. I could feel my heart beating out loud and I was scared to death. Her grip on my hand tightened and I could feel my hand breaking into two. I removed my pistol and shot at her, only to see the bullet go through her and shattering the wall behind.

Terrible pain hit me as my hand severed into two and I started running for my life. She started running after me. I knew, I was dead. When I was about to reach the door, I heard her hand tapping on my back. I did not turn back. The sound grew louder and I heard my name. I was shocked to see that my manager was standing behind my back with his angry face and shouting out loud that the lunch time was long over.

I had a huge sigh of relief that I was alive, but very sad that my beautiful wife was a dream.

"Life is so beautiful"

with lov
kaly

[Pinksnblues]

hey Kaly, wonderful piece of imagination.. gives goose bumps and makes me feel a part of that scene and run for my life too. That's what I feel is very important. How much you as a writer believe in the story for the readers to beleive in you. kudos.

[Lin Neiswender]

Kaly, this is a really good first effort at a short story. You built up suspense by letting us know that everything was not correct. I like how you framed the story as being a dream, not revealed till the last part of the story. I hope you keep writing!

[Dan Goodwin]

Kaly I like your sense of imagination in this. It has an innocent kind of charm that draws the reader in, then takes the dark twist, before revealing it to be a dream.

Yes, keep writing please...

Dan

[Anne Westlund]

This is a cool story, Kaly. I liked the suspense and wished it had gone on a little longer. :)